I have made a poem for reading about Refugees, hope you like it.
Running away is starting to get to me
Even when there is luck
Fighting for my life is what I'm going through
Undergoing this pain is annoying
Getting place to place still being followed
Eventually it ended
Ending was a happy ending for me
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Hello Darion,
ReplyDeleteI like your acrostic poem because it is a bit unique compared to other acrostic poems. This reminds me of my acrostic poem that I made. I think its pretty cool. Have you thought about add so colours or pictures to your poem to help it stand out?
Hello Darion,
ReplyDeleteI really like this acrostic poem and let me tell you why. I like how good the sentences are like man there so detailed and just good. I also like how all the sentences corresponded to each other and sound amazing when you read it all together. Maybe Next time you could make the blurb a bit bigger nd more descriptive. Good job!
Hello Darion,
ReplyDeletei like this post because I can tell you have put a lot of time and effort into writing this poem.
Maybe next time you could tell us what a refugee is in this blog post.
This reminded me of when I was reading the article and really got me hooked in.
Kind Regards Ritchie (:
Hi Darion,
ReplyDeleteI like this poem because it sounds so good and real. Maybe next time you could add a bit more to your blurb. What made you think of the ending?
-Caitlin
Nice job Darion. I like how you gave it a happy ending. This reminds me about the poem I made on refugees. Maybe next time you could explane why you made this poem. Whats your favorite line? Keep up the good work,bye.
ReplyDeleteCiao Darion
ReplyDeleteI loved your poem it is fantastic you must of worked really hard on it nice job. My favorite part was when you said fighting for my life is what im going through. Nice job for puting a happy ending though hope you do more. Next time you could explain why you made this poem for.
How long did it take?
Did you like it?
From Tama
Wow Darion I really like this poem, I'm not saying that you have to do it but you should maybe write more poems if you can.
ReplyDeleteHey Darion,
ReplyDeleteI really like your poem.
Maybe next time you could add how long it took and what made you want to do this poem.
Overall good job:)
Ariana
Kia ora Darion I like this poem because its acrostic and different from other acrostic poems but I guess every poem is different
ReplyDeleteDid you enjoy making this?